Retro's Detective Agency. (Updated 26th April)

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Yeah, from now on it can go me, picka, fox etc.

Still we'll have to rethink the story.
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Yeah

I guess I shouldn't have just thrown in RS like that.

Maybe.
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It's not that bad.
But that is a bit of a monkey wrench, bro.
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We're good at this though

I think we can push through a few wrenches here and there.
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Pretty sure Fox is correct.

I like to think I have an okay relationship with fate, it wouldn't leave you three at a loss. I'd have nothing to follow and read otherwise.

On a more serious note, this is pretty good writing, game or not. I like it. It's like a good TV show.
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I'll be waiting for more updates. I wonder how this could be rethinked, however.
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Hurry yo ass up BRO.
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So, to keep some sort of interest alive in this during a slight dry spell of updates, I have a prompt!
Three questions.
Answer all of them if you'd be so kind.

1. What would you like to see happen in this story?
2. If you were to be in this story, how would you want to be portrayed?
3. What members would you like to see the most?

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I will be kind.

1) I'd like to see you invite a reoccurring guest to write sometime soon. Someone you trust. It sort of ruins the dynamic of the detectives to add a fourth detective, so I'd be more interested in seeing a character that you only call on to write at certain times, but is still on some level reoccurring. For instance, detective Techno needs to call on outside expertise for some reason. This person would not post like you three do--regularly--but only when prompted--then leave until needed again. Could be a good save tool if you've accidentally written yourself into a corner and need someone looking from the outside in.

2) Probably someone connected to you, Techno. Parallel me helping you in the past. Even if it's a small cameo. That's cool. You know, like the Oracle from Batman.

3) Twili or Mamkute, they seem like they'd make interesting appearances.
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1. COOL ACTION MAFIA DEATH MYSTERIES FUN COOL RIDES
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Heh, I should be getting to write this soon, hopefully before the end of August.

I'd like for this topic to stay on the first page though.
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My GOD, this is great. I hope you make good on those words Retro.
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This is still awesome. I'll never read it without listening to Godot's theme, it just fits perfectly.

Write write write, Retro!
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1. I would appreciate a lot of grimdark, maybe include a bit more action and romance, fasten the pace a bit, yada yada, etcetera.
2. I suppose I'd like to be a character that would resemble somewhat like the Chick or the Heart or Den Mother or something. I'm always portrayed that way and I had taken quite a liking to it.
3. Well, I already loooooove the characters you have included as the protagonists. But, including Flame, AtomicBat, Twili, The Blur, Enzo, Samy, and the others would be good too. Hydro and Ninja are perfect for adding biting satire too. Tess would make a great secondary Chick kind of character. Add in a variety, man!
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Read Pastaa's post and actually read up to find what she was on about.

1. A long build up, then a huge tragedy that makes me cry. I'm a sissy man and proud, I always cry at stuff like that.
2. I'd love to be a Fox Mulder. Conspiracy, conspiracy, supernatural, yadda yadda yadda. That is, without the 'losing a sister' part.
3. I say Pastaa, Enzo and Twili off the top of my head.
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Heh, thanks guys.

Right now, I'll write when I find the music I need, currently searching through Youtube.
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Bump

Lets go guys.
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Waiting on the Retroactive Brother of Linking Exs.
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Wait man.

I'll do it when I get the music, and try before the end of August.
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i can get you said music, yo.
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We were at a loss. A major one.
Rain fell from the sky, oppressing the atmosphere.

“Let's sit down and think about this." I gestured my hand towards a table with some seats for Picka and Fox, we all sat down, and Picka opened a bottle of Whiskey on the table, and filled a shot glass. I lit a Cigarette, inhaled deeply, and exhaled it out, thunder sounded from outside, and the rain continued to hit the ground.

"From what we know, the victim in this case was..." I paused, and directed my head to the floor. “...RS. And from how we got attacked, our only lead is MEK's "family”. Any ideas?"

We all looked at other places in the room, I guess it was to think but maybe it was just because we liked the silence, Picka then started to speak, breaking the silence.

“Okay, this might sound a little batty, but here me out. What if ‘Family’ refers to a ‘Usergroup’?” Picka looked at us, awaiting some kind of confirmation. “Folks like to say that their ‘Usergroup’ is their family, and even if it’s completely in an ironic sense, I think looking into it is worth a shot.”

Me and Fox looked at each other, then back at Picka.

"So, what you're saying is that MEK was part of a Usergroup?” Fox surmised, trying to wrap his head around it.
"It's just a theory, but we might as well try to narrow down our search. We have nothing else to go on.” Picka pointed out.

As Picka finished the sentence, he downed a glass of Whiskey. Fox redid his tie, and I lit another cigarette. I guess we all wanted a small break before we got down to business.

"So,” I said, trying to break the ice, "What kind of Usergroups have you come up with?"
"How about the Mana Force? Those guys seem to always be doing something suspicious" Picka suggested.
"No, they disbanded." Fox replied.
“Right, right.”
"Maybe the Monochrome Legion? I vaguely remember them being hated around here, maybe revenge?" I said yawning.
"Nah, they're too preoccupied with being silly." Picka replied.
"What about the BUSHNAK club? Didn't they have some sort of family or something, Fox you're part of it, what do you think?" I suggested.
"Ha!” Fox laughed, grabbing the same bottle of whiskey Picka had, gulping it down from the bottle. None of it spilled on his suit. He had a knack for keeping his suits clean. "That was a long time ago Retro, and you know it. I'm not part of that anymore, I wouldn't know,” He was obviously frustrated with my choice of words. "Besides, BUSHNAK’s been missing for months.”
"Hmm, then what about the Rainbow Force? I mean, they might not be a big group, but they have the means to do something like this, and I believe they were a family of some sort.” Picka explained.
"I doubt it, Rainbow Force haven't been big around here for some time, I think they just stopped, from what I've seen anyway.” I told him, and he nodded in agreement.
"Hey, what about the MLP fanclub?” I said.

There was a deathly silence in the room, then at the same time all three of us burst out laughing. Fox was banging the table and laughing hysterically, making the whiskey fall off the table and shatter. We laughed for some time until we could laugh no more, and even then a giggle or two would come out of our mouths until we finally got down the business. It felt nice. We needed a release from all this stress. I guess we all enjoyed it.

"You don't think... it could be from our own Brotherhood, do you, Picka?" Lightning hit the ground outside, lighting up the room for a brief second. Thunder followed, and Picka looked grim for a second.
Then, he smiled. “Come on, Retro.” Picka replied, with an assured confidence in his words. "Our Usergroup isn't into stuff like this, and besides, why would they come to kill us, and for that matter RS? She was a happy member with the group for some time.” He took a sip of whiskey from his glass.
“You're right, you’re right”. I concurred, regretting even bringing it up. “Well... I'm out of ideas."
"Me too.” Fox said.
"Me three.” Picka concurred.

We all just sat there on that table, looking around the room at other things, thinking about what to do next.

"Hey wait a minute" Fox exclaimed, checking his inside pocket for something. "Aha! Found it."

Fox had a card in his hand. He told us that he would be able to get us help from his "sources" to get some more answered out of MEK and Crash. Picka and I look at each other in disbelief, but the confident look on Fox's face made us somewhat reassured. He knew what he was doing, we liked to believe. He went into another room to send a Private Message to his source.

We waited for a while, I got out another bottle of Whiskey. In seconds, the bottle was gone, leaving us in a situation where we couldn’t say anything longer than a sentence to each other. I wasn't sure why. We just waited, and soon enough, a shadow appeared from the window and walked towards the door. He wore a brownish tan trench coat, and a hat. Over his shoulder was an umbrella due to the rain, which he shook and placed on a nearby table.

"Ah, here's my man.” Fox stood up and greeted him. It was none other than Chaos! I guess he finally quit a poker game.
"Fox told me you guys needed a way into the Mod Forum. I'm your way in. Follow me.”

We walked out of the thread, and went down the forum. The rain was still coming down hard, but Chaos didn't mind, and neither did Fox with his huge umbrella. Fox was carrying this massive umbrella, just trying to keep his suit intact from the rain, and Picka and I laughed about, until we realized we were soaking wet, instead.

"So, Chaos,” I started, "Why are you helping us out now?”
"Well, let's just say I owe Fox a favour.” Chaos replied, rubbing the back of his head nervously.
"What kind of favour?"I responded
“Forget about it, Retro. It didn't involve you then, and it doesn't now." Chaos seemed aggressive in his words, and I didn't want him to regret helping us, so I shut my mouth and continued on through the rain.

"Here we are.” Chaos said, we all walked behind him into an alley. The entire alley was being covered by a thick roof, I guess to keep it clean.

We stepped through a door, and found ourselves in the illusive Mod Forum. A lot of intelligent conversation seemed to be going on, probably due to the fact that all the mods were here. Fusion, Mooncow, everyone except Torro, but at the time, we didn’t even notice. We all just assumed he would be sleeping on the job.

"Well my job here is done. The other mods are aware of the situation, and won’t bother you until you find what you’re looking for. Whatever that is.” Chaos said, as he turned around and walked out back into the rain. "Oh, and Fox, don’t call me again. We’re even...”

As we walked on to go see MEK and Crash for some questioning, we saw a figure, talking to someone. I backed myself against a nearby wall, and poked my head around and watched from afar. None of us could get a clear shot of who this person was, or what they were saying, but Picka was taking notes on what was happening for future reference despite that. Suddenly, a bag is switched from the hands of one to the other, and soon two people walk away. I knew that one of them was MEK, I could tell from the size of him, and the other must've been Crash, because he looked a little beat up. They walked down the forum, and back into the alleyway. I took one last glance to try and catch who it was, and saw a red hoodie, and a glimpse of white hair. I was shocked.

"Cr-cr-Crazo?" I said aloud. Fox slapped me, and then pressed his hand against my mouth. Crazo stopped, turned around, and looked around the dimly lit forum. He stood for a long time, until MEK whispered something to him. The three walked off into the shadows, as we just narrowly avoided detection.

I turned to Picka, and saw him writing down some more notes in his notepad. "Hey, Picka?" I asked trying to get his attention. "What do you think all of this means?”
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The evaluation of the usergroups gave me a good laugh. Great continuation, retro.
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TechnoGeisha wrote:I liked it better when we got comments.
Also another thing I'd like to say.

As many of you have seen the music we've all been using has been Jazz, but I'm wondering what kinds of music you'd like to see incorporated here for some of the chapters, links to the type of music would be nice? Instrumentals only.
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Big band.

More jazz.

Stuff that was used back when detectives were the thing.
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