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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 7

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Lol, "anus eye"
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 7

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YES TWO PAGES FINALLY

This next one I actually found with minimal effort. I kept clicking 'Random Article' on the Creepypasta Wiki hoping I'd find something good (and by good I mean bad), and I did, and boom another subject.

Subject 8: Warrior Cats Lost Book

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Warri ... _Lost_Book
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Okay, a lot of you do not know what Warrior Cats are . . .

Warrior Cats is a book series with cats that fight. Here are the names of two of them: Firestar and Graystripe. Okay, here is the story . . .

It all began when I was walking down my stairs. I am a big Warriors fan, I thought.

I looked down and saw a Warriors book. The title was "IT'S OVER NOW".

It was in big letters. "I can't wait to read it!" I thought. So I went in my room and started to read it. The cover art was scary but thought it was cool, so I ignored it. The Special Thanks page was freaky. It said "Special thanks to THEH&". What does that mean? I was scared, but I loved Warriors so much I began at chapter 1. The first page said "FIRESTARWILLDOITNOW" and then the rest was blank . . . I turned the page to see random letters and numbers. I tried for hours to figure it out and I did! It said this . . .

"FIRESTAR WHYWHYWHY?!" said Graystripe to Firestar. Firestar said this . . . "IWILLDOIT". The rest was blank . . .

I turned the page to read this . . . Then some random stuf . . . "NONOTHNOTYNOETYNOETYO" Firestar (p. 56).

"itwiilll soooonhappen NOWDONTREAD" The rest of the page was spam and crap. So I stopped reading and was freaked out . . . NEVER AGAIN!
This one was just really underdone. I mean it looks like it took 10 minutes max. It was very unexplained, because 'I was walking down the stairs', where apparently the writer was just thinking about how he/she was 'a big Warriors Fan', and then just randomly happens to look down and find a book completely unexplained and sitting there in the person's own home, and starts reading it without even questioning it. At all.

The grammar here was also very bad, with spaces between each period in an '...' and subject verb disagreement. (Although after 'last of among us', I've learned to care less about grammar.)

This one reminds me of 'GHOST'. It was obviously written by a fan of a series and the actions in the story heavily dilute the scariness.

Well another subject, stay tuned, I'll find something.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 8

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Well it was the week and I was busy and all of that. Time for the next subject, which was suggested by Riku.

Subject 9: Jamesnintendonerd.avi

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Jamesnintendonerd.avi
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Everybody saw the Angry VideoGame Nerd (or Angry Nintendo Nerd / JamesNintendoNerd) right? Well, anybody thinks that the series started in 2004, right? Well, here are the facts. The real series started in 1999. But nobody saw the episode. It was actually episode 0 (or -1 as described in the .avi description, but i don't think it is possible). I got it by modifying the actual website's html, and since the video didn't show up, i downloaded it. The episode starts as usual, but there was no intro. I guess it's why it is the first episode ever. It starts on the game catridge. The cartridge was blank, and pretty old. All i could see was "Th. ..eat.r." I was trying to do all possible name combinations. "The Eater? The Rate? Threat?" But no. I wasn't correct. It was THE THEATER. THAT ****** GAME FOR PC, IN NES FORM?!? The quality was reeeeeally bad, and the volume was very loud. The Nerd looked very serious, almost crying. He said a lot of bad words to who suggested it, and then said that he was the Nerd, and he was gonna review it. If you read the story of the game, you know what happens. If not, go read it, because I'm in a hurry, and I'm not gonna write it here. Wanna know why? I'll explain later.

So when the Ticket-Taker came, there was a VERY VERY VERY short scene (0.5 seconds) of the Nerd putting a gun in his eye, and the thumb on the other hand was missing. That scene scared me, even if it was 0.5 seconds long. Then the Swirly Head Man come. The Nerd looked like if he was gonna die. He throw up, and then the screen turn black for 30 seconds. Back to the Nerd, he looks almost dead. If you look closely, you will notice he's missing some teeth. He has his face bruised, and he was still playing the game. After 3 minutes of horror, like screaming, blood, swearing and other things i hate to recall, here comes the final scene (the last 2 minutes). He said he was tired (with a lot of swearing of course)) and he would have stop there. I didn't know what he meant, because there was 2 minutes left. So here's what he did: he covered his eye, stabbed himself and broke his neck. Then he jumped out of the window. The words "YOU ARE NEXT," "HELP ME," and "CURSED YOU ARE" flashed rapidly on the Nerd's corpse. I know the episode was edited, because he is still alive, but i felt a bit of reality in it. Why am I in a hurry you say? I'M CURSED I'M CURSED I'M CURSED I'M CURSED I'M CURSED I'M CURSED I'M CURSED.
This was like the basis of all 'Lost Episode' creepypastas rolled into 2 paragraphs of extreme derp. I mean it uses such worn out phrases as 'The quality was really bad.', 'The game cartridge was blank.', and 'I got the episode downloaded with my 1337 NiNjA HaXxOrZ sKiLlZz.' Also, this was about a freaking Youtuber. It had no basis as a Lost Episode. Even when the guy admits the video must have been edited, it would be a pretty advanced hack to do that, especially since the guy stabs himself, breaks his neck,and then jumps out of a window after.

This even brings in 'The Theater', which unlike anything in this thread is actually a good creepypasta. (Look it up if you want to read it.) In it James apparently gets to the 'Swirly Head Man' pretty fast, but in the original 'The Theater' story it actually could take hundreds of times of playing before you get lucky and get the Swirly Head Man.

In all this one had plotholes, and the whole thing was just far fetched.

Again, Riku suggested this one. I'll see what other scum I can dig up.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 9

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Fun fact, nerds house is only a one story building/a basement depending on the episode..
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 9

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Subject 8...Wow, even I couldn't write a worse creepypasta than that. Plus I'm a big warriors freak.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 9

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Oh boy guys it's time for 10 already. It's time for more of those scary beasts we know as Pokemon.

Subject 10: Pokemon Pink Pearl

http://fyeahpokemoncreepypasta.tumblr.c ... pink-pearl
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i was 7 at the time my mam had gotten me all the older games but now i wanted ruby and spphire!on the day i got ruby i imedietly turend it on .

evrything was normal util the title screen i had changed to a picture of spoinks pearl and it was called pink pearl i didnt want to go on since i wantdd the original utmy curiosity led me to carry on althought i wanted may it changed to someone called kcuf witch i laughed at since backwords it was ****.

evrything was normal until it was starter time there was an eevee ditto and missingno i chose missingo i was imeedietly sent to the elite 4 my i wizzed through but i hated how it new glitch kill witch brutialie killed evryone at the end a sprite appeard infront of me it said “u think i am a tool a killing michenie dont u” u know at the beggining when u name ur self that popped up it hap lodes of spacesit also said what do u have to say

my person said what i put”no i dont understan what u mean i wanted pokemon ruby not pink pearl”

he said “u will now die i watched as my overwold sprite was gruseomley being mureded i turend off the game and it hit off the was and shatterd
Oh man it's last of among us all over again. The writer apparently got the game when she was 7, but it looks like she wrote it when she was 4. I mean the grammar was so dumb with 'overwold', 'gruseomley', 'util', and 'understan', as well as a total betrayel of periods and the shift key. I mean this was just obviously written by someone between the ages of 5 and 8.

Also the way it portrays the story isn't that great either. There was just randomly 'spoinks pearl' as the background, and Spoink has nothing else to do in the story. Also with just a MissingNo., the writer apparently 'wizzed' through the Elite 4, where everyone got 'brutialie' killed.

In all this one was just obviously fake and yet another bad grammar monster.

The next one subject will probably be one of the stories from a list of pasta sent to me. Just glancing through the list I can see a Harry Potter spoof and a haunted copy of Mario Party 9. I'll see what I can do with these.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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I don't read any you post anymore unless they take up half your page. Short ones here get to the climax too fast.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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It's difficult finding stories that are both long and laughably bad.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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Have you tried reading creepy pasta's theory about how the show Rugrats was made or another story about in Spongebob that Squidwards committed suicide during the episode?
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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^Squidward's Suicide?

The new one is a "disgarce" as the writer would say.
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bufu12 wrote:Have you tried reading creepy pasta's theory about how the show Rugrats was made or another story about in Spongebob that Squidwards committed suicide during the episode?
there is no way I am reading the Squidward one - just that title has me scared :o
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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^I red it before, kinda creepy when I finished it and there was videos of it that people made. I'm too scared to watch because there might be screaming during the video and I can get easily scared by screamers.
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^ O.O
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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^Theyre not real videos, but videos that might be close to the story
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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Crash you haven't ever read Squidward's Suicide? It's like one of the most popular creepypastas ever.
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^I red that after I saw the Rugrat's theory posted on my friend's wall on Facebook, now I'm reading some creepypasta stories and having nightmares....Image Worth it!
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Blazing Groudon wrote:Crash you haven't ever read Squidward's Suicide? It's like one of the most popular creepypastas ever.
No, I haven't. But maybe I'm better off not reading it, because I watch Spongebob like everyday and I don't need that to put me off watching it.
Maybe you could give me a brief description of it, and then I'll decide whether to read it or not ;)
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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It's about a lost episode of Spongebob. It takes place right after the Spongebob Movie, and it's told by apparently an intern who was working for Nickelodeon and was able to watch episodes before they were to air on Nick. It has a few gore moments in it, if that's something you want to know about beforehand.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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It's best not to read it if you want to rethink your childhood life of Spongebob, but heres the brief description of it if you want to read.
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In the story, a guy was interviewing the creator of Spongebob about an episode that got messed up (I think thats how if starts off). The guy went inside the editing room with 2 other people I believed that are the editors of Spongebob. The video started to play and right when the video started to play, it showed the title of the episode named "Squidward Suicide". The episode starts off with Squidward playing his clarinet as usual, getting ready for his recital, then Spongebob started to annoy him and decided to play somewhere else. The video then starts to become static then showed a scene of a boy in his underwear with his left eye popped out with a shadow showing. The episode went back to Squidward at his recital with crowds booing at him including Spongebob, which is unusual, with everybody having realistic life. The episode, again, then switched to a girl in her underwear as well with her left eye popped out as well, but inside a pool of blood with the same shadow. The episode then switched to Squidward who was crying in his room for about 4 minutes which his crying started to get realistic. The episode showed another boy with his left eye popped out, but on the floor with his organs hanging outside his boy with the same shadow. It switch back to Squidward who was starring straight at you with realistic bleeding eyes, he slowly puts a shotgun in his mouth and pulled the trigger with realistic blood and brain splattering. The episode ends right there with nobody knowing what happened.
I think I explain what happened in the spoiler, but read what Blazing said about the gore moments before you read my explanation .
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^ I read the first few lines, and didn't want to read anymore O.O
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Yeah, scary
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DJ PON-3 at your service!
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^ I laughed.
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I can explain this easy:
-PVM hacks in SADX PC. And a crappy story to go with it.
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Re: Bad Creepypasta Analysis Time: Subject 10

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I guess I should finally get to updating this thread. Now let's see what story I'm gonna-
I've found my story. Looking at that I thought it was going to be yet another wonderful story about My Little Pony, but alas I was wrong. What I found is even more story worthy. Of all things we get a chao fanfic.

Subject 11: Salar the Chao

http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Salar_the_Chao
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It started off like a normal day playing Sonic Adventure DX. I noticed my chao Lugia was in its mating season. I bred it with my fully legit Super Sonic chao. Weird part is, when the egg came out, Knuckles became some gray sea color with a red diamond on his head. When the chao came out of the egg, I freaked out. It was a purple transparent chao! I named it Salar randomly. Salar had normal eyes with no mouth showing. I decided to make it an all around chao to see what it will evolve into. Oddly, no animal parts appeared when I gave it an animal. Pretty soon, it evolved into a Flying Chao, no sweat. That day, I maxed Salar's stats, all at level 99 with 9999 expeirence. I loved that chao. The next day, all of my chao hated me, exept Salar. I heard a voice through the speakers when I picked up Salar. "You love me. Why love other chao when you could love me?" It was Salar! He was talking to me! "I LOVE ALL MY CHAO THE SAME!" I yelled out. That made Salar come out of Knuckles' arms. Knuckles was still the same from the day Salar's egg came. Salar pulled out a gun. He pointed it to all my chao. "OH CRAP! HE IS GOING TO KILL MY AMAZING CHAO!" I yelled angerly. Salar killed all my chao. Except for Lugia, which will come next. "Lugia, time to die." Salar said in a sinister voice. "OMG! You are going to kill Lugia! How dare you! It took me months to raise!" I screamed. Finally, Salar killed Lugia. I cried so hard. Then, Salar gouged out Knuckles' eyes. There was so much blood, I felt like I was going to puke.

One of the dead chao was in the backround. It was Ho-oh. I took so much effort. The game crashed after this incident. Later on, I tried to release it with Tails, since Knuckles died in the incident. Tails then turned into Tails Doll when he entered the Chao Garden.

When I tried to release Salar, it said, "Salar doesn't want to go!" and instead of the normal, sad chao goodbye music, it was the the chao goodbye music backwards in G-Major. The game crashed once again. And this time, it was normal. But, I went into the chao garden with Tails (which now became Tails Doll) and heard Salar's voice. "I will return on November 2, 2011. Goodbye." Salar dissapeared. Another post coming November 2, 2011. Well, its November 2, 2011. And boy, did I have a surprise. NONE of the characters were playable. Except Sonic. I chose Sonic to see what will happen. Instead of Sonic, it was Metal Sonic Kai. He was only in Knuckles Chaotix, but I shrugged it. I went in the chao garden and saw Salar. He was WAY different when I first saw him. He is a Dark Chaos Chao.

"You have came like I told you to. Now come at 6:30pm tonight." Salar said. New post at 6:30pm. Sorry, late post. Anyways, all of the chao became alive again. I experimented with Salar for breeding purposes, and what came up was a Gold Chao. Also, Salar was acting like he was a regular chao. ʇsod s,ɹɐןɐsEdit

˙uopuɐɹq ɹɯ ʇxǝu ǝɹɐ noʎ ˙pɐǝp ʇou ɯɐ ı ˙buıʎıɟıɹɹoɥ puıɟ ןןıʍ noʎ ʇɐɥʇ buıɥʇǝɯos puıɟ ןןıʍ noʎ ˙ʌʇ ɹnoʎ uo uɹnʇ ˙ʎnb ǝɔıu ɹɯ ǝɹoɯ ou ˙ǝɹoɯʎuɐ ǝdɐɔsǝ ʇouuɐɔ noʎ ˙oɐɥɔ ǝɥʇ ɹɐןɐs ʎq pǝsɹnɔ ǝɹɐ noʎ 'spuǝıɹɟ ʎɯ
ʇsod s,ɹɐןɐs ResponseEdit

OK... that was just weird. I noticed it said Brandon in Salar's post. BRANDON IS ONE OF MY CLASSMATES! Could... OH CRAP.... has Salar just... CURSED BRANDON? Perhaps everyone gets cursed when they read this article. You cannot escape Salar's curse?!?! I'm freaking scared now.
Interviewing BrandonEdit

I decided to interview Brandon to get answers. He was nearly pale, and there was a gruesome bleeding scratchmark on his arm.

Me: Can you tell me what happened?

Brandon: (breathing heavily) Th-there... tape. (hands a tape to me)

Me: What is on the tape?

Brandon: (breaks into tears) Something you don- (falls to knees, tears fill his eyes)

Me: What?

Brandon: DO NOT WATCH THE TAPE!

Me: Why?

Brandon: Salar, Chao, HE IS GOING TO GET ME! If you watch it, Salar will get y- AAAAAUUUHHHHHH!!!! DON'T LOOK BEHIND! RUUUUUNNNN!!!!!

Me: Wh- FREAKING SALAR! HE IS GOING TO GET US!!!!! OH CRAP! OH CRAP! OH CRAP! (panicking)

I survived this near-death experience. As well as the tape. Not sure for Brandon, which was nowhere to be found.
Watching the Tape I ObtaintedEdit

Well, after a long time of not watching the tape, I decided to watch it. The label said, YOUARENEXT. I shrugged it off as I put the tape in my VCR slowly, and pressed PLAY.

What was on the tape was so freaking horrifying.

It showed what happened after I obtainted Salar, that terrible night. Salar talked to my Chao, "Your owner abused you guys." he said, "Do not listen to her at all!" Salar then tried to drown them all, and all the Chao had tears filling up their eyes. "THA-THATS NOT TRUE!!" I cried. The screen showed an odd creature that flashed on the screen twice, not a Chao, in the Chao Garden. It was black with blood stains on it, and had bright blue eyes that glowed brightly, it had sharp claws which could kill anything. The rest of the tape was just static. I had no idea how this happened, but it is very odd.
Salar's Chaos FormEdit

I haven't play Sonic Adventure DX in a loooong time, so I decided to start it up, but the game crashed.

It was odd, but all of my games in the Sonic the Hedgehog series crashed.

I tried them all, Sonic 1, 2,CD, 3, and Knuckles, 3D Blast etc., and they all wouldn't work. I just tried to boot up Sonic Adventure DX, and it finally worked.

However, the title screen said Salar Kills You with a picture of Salar and that weird creature. The screen switched to a picture of a ton of creepy Sonics and had some Japanese writing on it.

The screen cut to a battle palace, and Salar was in the form of Perfect Chaos! So, Salar was Chaos in discuise!

Or was he?

I was fighting as Super Sonic, like in the original Perfect Chaos battle. I beat Salar without a problem.

On the second phase, I beat him, and Salar was a normal chao ever since...

P.S.: The curse has been lifted!

P.P.S: Brandon is safe.
This was almost something I'd expect to read here on Chao Island. A creepypasta about Chao seems unique but this was still not a great story. The story wasn't believable or scary, and it was arranged very poorly, with a traditional story as half, and the other half in blog style order. I thought it was over, but then there was more. The pictures were also not realistic at all. I mean seriously.
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Seems legit.

Also there were the usual grammar mistakes, as well as pointless interventions from the Tails Doll and some unexplained black creature. It really had no coherency either, because instead of doing anything to the guy himself, the chao of evil decides to go for some random guy at the kid's school for no apparent reason.

This story in all was a very jumbled mixture of many story elements. For a beginner I guess it was meh, but still could use some worth with legitimacy. For my next esteemed work of literature, I'll probably go with a suggestion that Starmy PM'd me about Mario Party. Stay tuned with your computer somehow.
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